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The 200 Words Contest

FimFiction Link - Short ID: 539999/the-200-words-contest

Published: Jul '23

Review in No. 40329000
The 200 Words Contest is a 1k words experimental sort of story where Twilight has Pinkie Pie create 200 word stories in different categories. So here comes a review of each of them.
-Not Without You
NWY is a 200 word Drama about the importance of friendship. The Storm King has returned, and it's up to Twilight and Spike to acquire the materials necessary to defeat him. But they won't do it without each other.
This was enjoyable. I liked how Twilight and Spike's characters come off strong despite only having a few lines of dialogue.
-Philomena's Portal Faux-tastrophy!
PPF is a 200 words SoL about how Philomena makes a mistake. A mistake that leads to reality breaking all around Canterlot. Thankfully, Discord is there to help, and remind her that she should listen to Celestia.
It's a nice story, but it lacks impact. Even for a SoL story. Too much is spent going on about the chaos ensuing and not enough about Philomena's grief. Likewise, Discord as a deus ex machina is just too convenient of a way to close the story.
-Once Forgotten
OF is a 200 words Horror about something that lives beyond the known world. Something hungering for the light within ponies.
This is the weakest entry so far. There's some good prose, but it's all in service of no plot. There's nothing told beyond there's a spooky thing out there, and if you get too near, it'll turn you into a ghoul.
-Homer Simpson in Equestria
HSiE is a 200 words YAGTH comedy. In it, Homer Simpson goes to Equestria.
Pinkie cheated and used CelestiaGPT. Which is obvious with how flanderised Homer feels. A few lines got a smirk out of me, but this is exactly what you imagine it will be.
-The 40 Words Contest
T40WC is a 200 words experimental sort of story where Twilight has Pinkie Pie create 40 word stories in different categories. So here comes a review of each of them.
--Rarity's Kingdom
RK is a 40 words Drama in which Rarity defeats Grogar. He had it coming.
--Lyra's Date
LD us a 40 words SoL in which Lyra overthinks her date plans with Bon Bon. But Bon Bon appreciates her efforts nonetheless.
--Baby C4K35
BC is a 40 words Horror about babies, the scariest thing of all. I think a round of editing could've turned this into an intriguing rhyme about a scary creature, but it falls short as it stands.
--Cheese Supreme!
CS! is a 40 word Comedy about being trapped in the Drive-Thru.
--The 5 Word Contest!
T5WC is a 40 words experimental sort of story where Twilight has Pinkie Pie create 5 or so word stories in different categories. So here comes a review of each of them.
----Applejack's Confession
AC is an 11 words drama about a relationship
----Poke
P is a 5 words SoL story about animal abuse
----Last Pony
LP is a 7 words story about the dangers of minorities
----The biggest joke of all of Equestria!
TBJoaoE is a 1 word story that should've won the entire contest
----The 1.4 Word Contest
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